First draft and feedback

This is the first draft of our thriller opening. The initial change from this version to our final one may not be very visible, but we felt as though a few changes had to be made. The first change that was made was the font used. We felt as though the old font wasn't scary enough to be in a thriller film. Also, the outlining of the letters made the font less effective. Therefore, we changed the font and removed the outline around the letters. The second change we made was the credits. We didn't use technical words such as 'directed by' and 'edited by', as we thought this would look tacky and take up too much space. Therefore, in our final piece, we have not included these words, but just our names to show we were all involved in the production. Finally, we cut a small amount out. We cut the zoom into the phonebox because we firstly thought it would just waste time, as before our piece was 2:02 (now 1:59), and secondly because it zoomed into the wrong place. The significance of cutting the phonebox not only saves time but it makes our opening look professional and clean.